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    The Phantasy Fragment: *CHAPTER 2 UP*

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    Ok Vypor finally read the whole thing. First of all kudos for your dedication on making this fanfic, it is nice to have a few story going on besides killing monsters to reach the boss, or to find a heat sword or whatever.

    Im gonna give my honest opinion, i really enjoyed your fanfic. No seriously i was so into it i forgot how much time had passed. Im defenitly a FAN from now on and ill surely read your next chapter.

    Ok you mentioned some feedback, I really liked the idea of the mags talking with each other and Rane, gave really a new prespective to the mag concept in the story, making them alot more alive really :P (you even named them) Btw they were a kalki mag right? (Might have missed that part). I think you should go into a bit more indepth with that fellow soldier that greated him at the beggining, i mean hes a grunt but he was actually pretty cool to talk to, he seems competent enough too since he been able to defend in the forest.

    Also maybe explore the Hunter Guild a bit, i mean we know so little about it in the game. I think maybe a "how i got here" part from Ranes past.

    Of course all of these you may have thought of and are saving for later anyway i really enjoy it Vypor, will be waiting for a new one.

    Keep WRITTING!

    EDIT: Almost forgot, Take another +1 Rep :P

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